Re: [Tower Ravens] DERT blurb

I have no preference in regards to picture or corny last line, but see the argument for saving the puns for the Tommy hx From: connollysue(a)hotmail.com To: ffion_coch(a)hotmail.com Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2013 14:41:29 +0000 CC: team(a)towerravens.org.uk Subject: Re: [Tower Ravens] DERT blurb I agree with Nikki over guardians. Also I think that Tower should be capitalised in this case. How about adding for the weekend after Tower? or possibly these birds have made a rare escape from the Tower for the weekend Oh Lord, I'm far more pedantic than Nikki. As for the final sentence, I can't decide. Maybe best left for Tommy, since it will be hard enough to think of any jokey material! It's possibly better being a short paragraph; we are a new side and we don't want to oversell ourselves and risk looking cocky, presumptuous, boastful, pretentious, etc. I think you've got the best pic there. Will the apparent endorsement of Simon give us extra credibility? (Hope he doesn't mind being included) Another day closer! S x From: ffion_coch(a)hotmail.com To: team(a)towerravens.org.uk Date: Tue, 15 Jan 2013 14:24:34 +0000 Subject: [Tower Ravens] DERT blurb Hi everyone, After the practice last night some of us wrote a short blurb for the DERT programme. It goes something like this: "Formed in the wake of DERT 2012, Tower Ravens are London's newest, youngest, most attractive (and only) female rapper team. Named after the feathered guardian of the crown jewels, these birds have escaped the confines of the tower and are looking forward to sampling the delights of Burton upon Trent. They don't like to crow too loudly but you'll soon be raven about them!" In the cold light of day I'm wondering whether the last sentence comes across as witty or just a bit sad. Perhaps we want to keep the crow and raving jokes for the Tommy routine. Anyone have opinions on this? I think this is the best photo to send - http://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid=10100366043358582&set=oa.4397932… Anyone object? Alternatively this one- http://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid=10100366045369552&set=oa.4397932… Nic, I think these are both your photos so could you possibly send me the original pictures? Thanks, Ffion x _______________________________________________ Tower Raven's mailing list team(a)towerravens.org.uk _______________________________________________ Tower Raven's mailing list team(a)towerravens.org.uk